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Zippy T
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| Yeah, plus I have a habit of creating dud threads...^^' |
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Sorra
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| Posted: Wed Aug 16, 2006 10:48 pm Post subject: |
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| awww well I"m about to post Zen's first story chapter on here, so maybe you can advertize or give me pointers... |
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Zippy T
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| Posted: Wed Aug 16, 2006 10:59 pm Post subject: |
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| ok |
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Sorra
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| Posted: Wed Aug 16, 2006 11:16 pm Post subject: |
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| crap I lost the book I wrote it in... guess I'll have to redo it.... I'll try to post it now... |
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Zippy T
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| Posted: Wed Aug 16, 2006 11:22 pm Post subject: |
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| lol mkay |
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Sorra
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| Posted: Wed Aug 16, 2006 11:35 pm Post subject: |
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| yay posted. You've already read the whole thingy so don't worry. |
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Zippy T
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| Posted: Wed Aug 16, 2006 11:50 pm Post subject: |
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| I noticed. I'm still gonna glance through it though. See if there's anything that needs emphasis and all that jazz. |
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Sorra
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| Posted: Wed Aug 16, 2006 11:56 pm Post subject: |
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| yeah I need it on there, I'm going to add Zen's narrations to give the idea of my first person thing I was leaning toward doing. It'll give more details and humor, but I"m hoping it'll make it smoother too. |
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Zippy T
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| Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 12:02 am Post subject: |
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| sounds good to me. It added a little forshadow I noticed with the mother thing |
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Sorra
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| Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 12:06 am Post subject: |
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| well he was actually talking about his birth mom, but I guess it hints that he's a kid looking for a buddy. |
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Zippy T
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| Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 12:12 am Post subject: |
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| ah, I was thinking about how he always calls Ifalna mom. You don't really mention his mom much, not in the first one book at least. |
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Sorra
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| Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 12:17 am Post subject: |
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| yeah I couldn't find how to put it in. She's from Terrasyl and gets left behind when they finally break away from Minos. And Minos kills her off for trying to tell Hojo his weakness. |
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Zippy T
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| Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 12:25 am Post subject: |
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| Ah, I see |
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Sorra
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| Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 12:29 am Post subject: |
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| yeah... I didn't know how to put that in.......................................... |
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Zippy T
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| Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 12:35 am Post subject: |
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| Yeah, maybe that should be put in one of the later books. |
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